shilgia

once upon a time in a time in a pallace far away.lived a good princes named hamed Shilgia shilgia.

she lived with a bad mom.

Horror? asked her magical mirror look who was the most beautiful girl in the city, and the mirror said shilgia

the queen send the hunter to kill Shilgia And bring Her heart into and a box. the hunter told shilgia to run Into the forest. The the hunter brought the queen pig’s heacs heart instead.

The queen discovred that That Snow White still alive lives so she the queen wore a costume She and  made a spell about an apple that would make someone who eat ate it sleep for a year, of death Only a kiss of true love will annul the curse. The the queen She gave Snow White an old Snow Blouse for a lifetim?? The Queen ran away and the The Prince found Snow White, he kissed her and she returned to life and everyone lived happily ever after.

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כל הכבוד על מאמציך.

Spelling – 10

Grammar – 10

Clarity and coherency – 25

five elements – 35

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