Once there was a boy named Bobby.

Bobby loved roller-skating. He was a champion.

He won all competitions.

He was also the OVERWATCH Champion.

But once a spider stung him and he got spider’s strength and spider forces.

Then he saw a thief and he was nervous and suddenly the thief saw him and took out AK 47 (rifle) and then Bobby had a kind of tickle in his head and he dodged the thief’s stealth !!!!
Then the thief said: What?!? How is that possible?!?!
And Bobby replied: It’s the spider’s sense !!!!!!!!!!!!!
!boom!
The thief struck Bobby from the head
And Bobby said: That’s justice !!!

Bobby was proud to be have arrested a thief alone?
Bobby had always dreamed of being a hero.

He saw a criminal trying to take over the world and he fought him!
The criminal said, “You will never win me!”
And the spider boy said: I can only win with when? I think about the family and friends who believe in me !!!!!!
!boom!
The criminal said: Why do you think you’ll win?
Spider Boy said: Because I’m Spider Justice !!!!!!!!!!!!

Said the criminal won? well I am too weak!
Spider Boy said: justice is the best in the world !!!!!!!!!

!The end!

שון הסיפור מאוד יצירתי ולמדתי ממך

.חסרה עקביות ויש מדי פעם משפטים לא קשורים

Spelling- 10

Grammar – 20

Clarity and coherency – 20

Five elements – 35

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